Hi, you are right about changes ❤️
I do have some suggestions for you, based on this post. While your words are properly spelled, some don't fit what you are saying. For example you have the word like instead of life, hay instead of have, and a few other things.
I understood what you were trying to write, but it really could have had a lot more impact with a few small edits ❤️
!PIZZA !ALIVE